Rainbow Snippets – 12.12.15

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Today’s six sentence snippet is from Stumble Forward, a little later in the story than last week’s offering. You can check out all the author’s snippets on the Rainbow Snippets Facebook page.
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Alec was struck dumb for a moment. He huffed out a laugh and mirrored Ethan’s posture, saying in the same whispered tone, “I have no clue what you’re talking about.”

Ethan’s eyes widened in disbelief, and he shook his head. “Seriously? You don’t see the way he behaves? The way he looks at you?”

12 Responses to Rainbow Snippets – 12.12.15
  1. P.T. Wyant Reply

    I wonder if he really doesn’t know or if he’s surprised that someone else sees it. Either way, great dialogue.

    • Alex

      Alex Reply

      Alec is 100% in denial at this point. I think that it comes from not believing he deserves to have anything good in his life. My poor boy. Thank you for the comment! : ) x

  2. Elin Reply

    He’s mirroring Ethan. Is there an emotional connection there? Most intriguing.

    • Alex

      Alex Reply

      Thank you! Ethan started as a side character but everyone who’s read this so far loooves him, so I’m going to give him a much bigger role in the second book, I think : ) x

  3. Jana Denardo Reply

    I like this exchange.

    • Alex

      Alex Reply

      Thank you for reading! x

  4. Rian Reply

    My, my, nice exchange. Is Alec really clueless or pretends to be?

    • Alex

      Alex Reply

      Thank you so much : ) Alec is totally in denial at this point. I think he sees it but he’s been telling himself it doesn’t mean what he secretly wants it to mean…if that makes sense. And, Ethen knows him well enough to realize it might need pointing out, thankfully x

  5. Charley Descoteaux Reply

    I have a feeling he’ll be seeing it from now on! Nice snippet, i like the way you show us how these two characters are feeling, letting us see it at the same time the other guy does.

    • Alex

      Alex Reply

      Oh, he does…in all the ways : ) Thank you for the lovely comment. I try my hardest to show not tell, and it’s fun writing from a particular pov and slowly revealing the plot as the character comes to understand it x

  6. Clare London Reply

    Immediately sets the scene, it’s great! 🙂

    • Alex

      Alex Reply

      Thank you so much for commenting! I’m glad you liked it : ) x

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