Today’s six sentence snippet is from Stumble Forward, a little later in the story than last week’s offering. You can check out all the author’s snippets on the Rainbow Snippets Facebook page.
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Alec was struck dumb for a moment. He huffed out a laugh and mirrored Ethan’s posture, saying in the same whispered tone, “I have no clue what you’re talking about.”
Ethan’s eyes widened in disbelief, and he shook his head. “Seriously? You don’t see the way he behaves? The way he looks at you?”
I wonder if he really doesn’t know or if he’s surprised that someone else sees it. Either way, great dialogue.
Alec is 100% in denial at this point. I think that it comes from not believing he deserves to have anything good in his life. My poor boy. Thank you for the comment! : ) x
He’s mirroring Ethan. Is there an emotional connection there? Most intriguing.
Thank you! Ethan started as a side character but everyone who’s read this so far loooves him, so I’m going to give him a much bigger role in the second book, I think : ) x
I like this exchange.
Thank you for reading! x
My, my, nice exchange. Is Alec really clueless or pretends to be?
Thank you so much : ) Alec is totally in denial at this point. I think he sees it but he’s been telling himself it doesn’t mean what he secretly wants it to mean…if that makes sense. And, Ethen knows him well enough to realize it might need pointing out, thankfully x
I have a feeling he’ll be seeing it from now on! Nice snippet, i like the way you show us how these two characters are feeling, letting us see it at the same time the other guy does.
Oh, he does…in all the ways : ) Thank you for the lovely comment. I try my hardest to show not tell, and it’s fun writing from a particular pov and slowly revealing the plot as the character comes to understand it x
Immediately sets the scene, it’s great! 🙂
Thank you so much for commenting! I’m glad you liked it : ) x